contrasts with the image of the slippers and jumper, arousing the reader’s interest.
One minute twenty-six seconds – Frankie checked his watch for the fi fteenth time that hour. The busy wrens were singing their night-time lullaby, bringing home the last of the juicy worms to hungry mouths. If he left it any longer, Sarah would be home with the grandkids and he was supposed to be there to greet them in his cosy slippers and knit ed jumper. However, his time had improved in this practice session and he knew the deadline for the application was approaching. He wanted to reassure himself that he still had it before posting that daunting form lying locked in his cupboard since last year.
This descriptive sentence shows us that it is approaching night time – the student has used ‘Show, Don’t Tell’.
This reveals that he is a grandparent. Suggests that he is
This shows that this is a real challenge for the man so the reader becomes more invested in this story.
The corners of his mouth formed a crescent shape when he thought of the hilarity of what he was at empting to do. ‘CIA Agent Wanted: Play Your Part in Protecting American Lives.’ With that reminder, Frankie reset his watch, put his head down and focused on the placement of his feet. One minute twenty seconds. He was get ing there. At 62 years of age, he still had it. He returned to the car, changed his clothes and runners and decided to make a pit stop at the Post Offi ce to buy one important stamp.
His motivation for training is
fi nally revealed. P. 67 K
Go to your Writing Skills Book to fi ll in a frame to help you develop
your own character in response to this Exam Focus question.
